Margaret Louise

@Frank, no it was not! But I'm definitely checking that out now! Thanks for the feedback, always greatly appreciated:)

The second Ramblings poem, having nothing of course to do with the first, called the same thing through a complete lack of imagination :) Thoughts? The storm heats up. Pink ...

On the contrary, Bolt, I think this is a brilliant poem. The "nonsense" of it does have a point, as explained in the final line. It's innovations like this that ...

I tread water. I let my tears wash into the sea, Salt with salt, And I remember you, You, swallowed by the heavy darkness, Taken by the sea. I curl ...

Thanks for the suggestions, you have several good points. Soon I'll go back and polish it.

Can you please review this? Thanks!

I've got two poems of the same name, go creativity, this is number one. Tell me what you think? Sometimes I want to write Something beautiful like Words are flowing ...

I really really liked this poem. The only thing that might be changed is the breaks in the lines. Like the first one, I wonder if you don't want to ...

I really liked this, but it's strangely vague. Particularly the first couple lines: Every ten seconds my reborn shadow fades, taking a little bit of me with it. It's obvious ...

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I agree with the above reviewer. Often, the first drafts of a poem are very rough. The best way to dig deeper is to keep writing. Write every word or ...

It seems like every reviewer has asked the same question: why are they separating? It's funny, because I wrote this for a friend of mine, who split up with her ...

After reading your story, I have the feeling I very rarely get, after putting down a spent book after days of being hooked between the pages, and very often that ...

Thanks for the review! The man was fake; she imagined a prince on her lawn to distract her from her reality, which isn't sufficient to make her happy. When her ...

First off, welcome to YWS! Now, let's get reviewing. I liked the repetition and overall tone of this poem, but it could be longer and more detailed. You switch so ...